Technical Description Peer Review Worksheet
Title of Paper Reviewed: Apple Earpods Evolution
Author Name: Allen Cabrera
Reviewer’s Name: Richard Karikari
- What sections does the technical description include? What, if any, sections are missing?
| SECTIONS INCLUDED | SECTIONS NOT INCLUDED |
| Definition/Function | Explanation |
| Components | |
| Visuals | |
| Conclusion | |
| References |
- Is the technical description written using objective language? Identify an example of effective objective language, and any place where subjective language or “ad language” is used.
| OBJECTIVE | SUBJECTIVE |
| AirPods were the best-selling item that Apple has had to offer since 2018, so it’s safe to say that purchasing them today would be a wise investment. | They had a completely new shape, curved design, lettering for the respective ears in “R” and “L,” and a new sound system. |
- What logical principal of organization (see reading on technical descriptions for a refresher) best describes this paper?
Mechanism Description
- Are there any places where the language is too vague? Identify them. What questions do you have about the language? What makes it unclear to you? Identify one place where the language is exceptionally clear or detailed. What makes this language easier to understand?
| Difficult to understand | CLEAR LANGUAGE |
| These earpods are included with every iPhone purchased today, and they have even changed to accommodate the iPhone’s changed headphone jack, converting its 3.5mm jack to a lightning port. I’m really interested in your write-up but I don’t really understand this statement. | Numerous functions were supported by the earpods, including calling, playing music, and even recording audio when sending voicemails or creating voice memos. |
- Who do you think the audience for this technical description is? What purpose does the technical description serve?
I think the audience includes Iphone users. Its main purpose is to introduce the features of the earpods to users and potential users.
- Are clearly labeled images included? Do they serve to strengthen the description, or do they make it less clear? Why?
Yes, there are clearly labeled images which help to identify the differences between the previous and current earpods
- Does the conclusion demonstrate that research has been done on the item? Is there any additional context that you might need provided in the description? Any unanswered questions you have about the item?
The conclusion is quite great but I think saying a little about the availability, price, and how often Apple releases new Airpods to the market.
- Identify 2 Strengths, and 2 areas for improvement and ask 1 question about the content written.
| STRENGTH | AREA OF IMPROVEMENT |
| Well-labeled imagesGreat definition and function | Justification of work (Presentation)Conclusion not too convincing |
